Thesis: Video games such as Kill Yourself In 5 Minutes and The Torture Game 2 explore the fixation with death in modern society and how we choose psychologically choose to address the issue through humor and privatized violent fixations.
Intersting topics! Seeing as I just got mine down.. I have NO room to critique others.. However....
I think you use the word "choose" twice.. I read it a couple of times and am still a little perplexed.
YOu wrote," Video games such as Kill Yourself In 5 Minutes and The Torture Game 2 explore the fixation with death in modern society and how we choose psychologically /choose/ to address the issue through humor and privatized violent fixations."
I think I got it... prob just needs to be cleaned up a little to get your audience's attention right away. It needs to be a trainwreck so they keep watching.
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Intersting topics! Seeing as I just got mine down.. I have NO room to critique others.. However....
I think you use the word "choose" twice.. I read it a couple of times and am still a little perplexed.
YOu wrote," Video games such as Kill Yourself In 5 Minutes and The Torture Game 2 explore the fixation with death in modern society and how we choose psychologically /choose/ to address the issue through humor and privatized violent fixations."
I think I got it... prob just needs to be cleaned up a little to get your audience's attention right away. It needs to be a trainwreck so they keep watching.
Thanks for sharing!
yes I relized that gramatical error the secong choose isn't supposed to be there however I can't figure out how to edit it :X
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